Thursday, February 02, 2006

Need I Say More?

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The Rhetorical Breakdown:

Rhetorically good:
a "Thank you" is included at the end.
Rhetorically bad:
the main message is not an "accompanying communication."
Rhetorically ugly:
"and/or" is never allowed in my book.

Rhetorically good:
they use "please."
Rhetorically bad:
"person or entity" is dehumanizing.
Rhetorically ugly:
all the alliteration just draws attention to itself
("proprietary," "privileged," and "protected"
and "disclosure," "dissemination," and "distribution").



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